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Topic = When a friend of yours makes a mistake, you have to tell him or her about it even though it may damage the friendship. Will you say that or not? As society continues to evolve, competition have been overheated. In this atmosphere, people are eager to find their friends who are able to interact with them to release their stress or tension from work. A friend is essential for life. However, if a friend of yours did a critical mistake, you have to give chance to him or she to make up for their fault. Even though this statement may affect to friendship negatively. For the future of your friends, they should know to their mistakes to prevent the same repetitions. This advice could be the step of growth by considering themselves. By any chance, this statement made end a friendship, you do not have to keep connection with friends. If they could not accept advice, they can not be your serious friends to communicate, last relationship, and share emotions.




Topic = When a friend of yours makes a mistake, you have to tell him or her about it even though it may damage the friendship. Will you say that or not? As society continues to evolve, competition have been overheated. In this atmosphere, people are eager to find their friends who are able to interact with them to release their stress or tension from work. A friend is essential for life. However, if a friend of yours did a critical mistake, you have to give chance to him or she to make up for their fault. Even though this statement may affect to friendship negatively. For the future of your friends, they should know to their mistakes to prevent the same repetitions. This advice could be the step of growth by considering themselves. By any chance, this statement made end a friendship, you do not have to keep connection with friends. If they could not accept advice, they can not be your serious friends to communicate, last relationship, and share emotions.


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